Friday 15 March 2013

Molly's 100 Word Challenge Week 23

I stumbled across the dusty room.  All memories were now flooding back.  Books and battered cabinets lay all around me.
This was my old life.  I was separated from my mother many years ago after a dreadful car crash.  I have never seen her since.  Not that mysterious cat we used to see.
Worried and scared, nervous and therefore afraid, I entered the bath- room, which was now mould-covered.  It was the same.....the orange soap we used to buy was still there....nothings changed.  If only I could have my mother back, if only I could have my life back, then my heart would be healed.
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14 comments:

  1. Lynda16 March 2013 at 09:24

    This was an excellent use of the prompt words and a very emotional piece of writing. You used your words carefully and carried the reader along with your strong emotions. Very well done on this excellent writing.

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:32

      Thank-you! I'm really glad you liked it! :D

      Molly R x

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  2. Chloe27 March 2013 at 11:54

    Hi Molly,
    I love your 100 word challenge. You have used some really good describing words like 'stumbled' and 'dreadful'. This is an amazing piece of work and I love it.
    Well Done Molly, from Chloe.

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:33

      I'm glad you liked it Chloe! x

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  3. adrian27 March 2013 at 12:03

    wow!
    this is a brilliant 100wc
    keep your work up

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:34

      Thanks Adrian!

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    2. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:36

      Thanks! I tried to make the house as gloomy as I could. :)

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  4. Anonymous7 April 2013 at 21:26

    This is a great story Molly.I can really imagine the house you're in. I feel sad for the girl in your story because I would be really sad if I was missing my mother.

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  5. mini8 April 2013 at 21:25

    Hi Molly I loved your 100 word challenge I loved every single bit of it.
    it was AMAZING!!!!

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:37

      I'm really glad that you thought it was AMAZING!

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  6. Anonymous9 April 2013 at 12:13

    Dear Maple class,
    I really enjoyed reading your 100wc. You used elipse which is fabulous. I like the word 'stumbled' because it's another word for walked. I also like the phrase 'all the memories came flooding back to me.' Maybe next time you could use a different range of connectives.

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:39

      Thank you for the tips! I will use them wisely in my new 100WC!

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  7. Nathan H9 April 2013 at 12:15

    Dear Molly,
    Your 100 word challenge is amazing because you have used a great adjective ' stumbled '. Also, I like how you have used a great phrase such as ' all memories were now flooding back '. Next time, you could use an adverb opener such as ' unfortunately, I stumbled across the dusty room '. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
    From your friend Nathan H at www.6D2012.highlawnprimary.net

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    1. Molly R x26 April 2013 at 11:41

      Well thank you Nathan! I'm soo glad that you liked it! And also, thanks for the tips! They will come in handy in my next piece of writing!

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