Warm and inticing, relaxing and calm, the bath beckoned me but neithertheless I separated from it. There were more important things to do. Remembering to feed Baker, the family cat, I braced myself for the harsh, bitter coldness. If there was a reason not to be a detective, if there was a reason not to be a human, that was it.
I bit my lip and I thought about the case.
Ten years ago a rich, hard-working family found a child (or at least, a youth) dead on their doorstep. They claimed it was 'more mysterious why she wore an orange minidress than if she was alive!' They didn't know she was my sister......
Hi Grace,
ReplyDeletewhat a superb story! Some beautiful descriptive language there. Just one thing, it's nevertheless rather than neithertheless. But well done! A brilliant story. I look forward to the next instalment :D
Mr Aldred, London, UK
WOW! I love the use of short sentences,it makes it so dramatic! Brilliant story Enid blyton.
ReplyDeletewow,I enjoyed reading your 100 word challenge. I thought it was really good ,it was a well puntuated story. I like your ending exspecilly it was like a clif hanger.
ReplyDeleteDear, Grace:)
ReplyDeleteI really like your 100 word challange this week, its really discriptive, I like how you said nethertheless I think this is a good connective. Next time, maybe you could add some more punctuation other that commas and full stops.
From your friend Annalese at Highlawn primary
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