It was a cold, dark evening and the lighthouse keeper was busy working. The partying villagers voices carried up into the lighthouse along with the bitter cold. Angrily the keeper slammed the window shut . Suddenly there was a loud crash and bang. The window blew open bringing back the cold air and plunging the room into darkness. The keeper took a step backwards and stumbled over his chair. In a hurry he lit a lamp and charged up the stone stairs. When he reached the watch room, the keeper held the lamp high and shouted “HELLO” but there was no reply.
Later– when he had searched the watch room -the keeper made his way up to the lantern room. He looked around, but there was nothing and no one to be seen. Suddenly the keeper heard the ear piercing horn of a ship. Panicking he grabbed the lens and shuffled away. Unfortunately his foot caught on the tool box, so the lens smashed into one thousand opeices along with all the keepers hopes! Would people think he did it on purpose? The keeper thought to himself .
He watched the ship coming closer. It was all his fault….
I love your work amy its amazing I love every bit of it but the best part for me is where you said plunging the room into darkness I reallylike that bit well. Done amy
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Elise
Hello this is Zedek and Zafirah from springwell junior school. We really like your story amy you added lots of adjectives and connectives welldone!!!!!
ReplyDeleteHello this is Bhavya and Farhana from springwell junior school. WELL DONE!!!! You used adjectives and well done!
ReplyDeleteAmy, this is a gripping story! I really like your first sentence, it is important not to make it boring, and you certainly haven't! The only tiny mistake is that you haven't put any punctuation before, in or after the first bit of speech, 'hello.' (But to be honest that doesn't really matter!)
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Isaac