Friday 9 November 2012

I will remember you- by Emily B

When I start to feel sad,
I remember all those soliers that fought in the war,
Fighting, shooting ,bombs and more.

It makes me grateful that Im here,
Not over there full of fear,
My mind is racing how it all started,
It makes me feel oh so down harted.

In bed I lie,
As soliders die ,
Buried in Flanders fields,
A poppy shall grow in there place.

The poppy on my chest,
Shall represent,
Those who rest in peace forevermore.

8 comments:

  1. Well done Emily. I like how your poem shows your feelings towards the fallen and what the poppy represents. A super piece of work.
    Mrs Prior

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  2. Thank-you Mrs Prior I did try to express my feeling through my poem.

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  3. Emily your I will rember you piece of work is amazing!Is that really how you feel sometimes?GREAT work, keep it up!

    From Lillie

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  4. I like your poem about the war, Brody.
    Are there wars there?

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  5. I think your poem is amasing! coming up with so many rhyming couplets must have been dificult. I wish I could write poems that good!

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    1. I agree Ester. I found you have made a difficult poem look so easy. You really have worked hard on this piece of work. Keep the incredibly amazing hard work up,

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  6. Wow Emily that poem is amazing i really like the bit where you put "those who rest in peace forevermore"n that is a lovely poem i love it well done



    from elise in maple class

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  7. Thankyou for all your lovely feedback everyone.

    Emily

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